如何在作文中举例子

例子三部曲

人物背景→过程→结局

1) 人物背景:例如姓名,身份,职业,与理由有关的细节1句

2) 故事因为本段理由逐步发展的过程。2~3 何人何时何人及其感受

3) 故事的结局(回到全文观点)1~2

例一

全文观点:人们要选择一个开心的工作

主题句:因为做一份工作时候没有快乐,他们会失去激情

解释部分:这样的话,他们的收入带来消极影响。当工作成为一个不快乐任务的时候,它再也不激励人们努力了

例子部分:

1 设计谁?

至少准备3类我们熟悉的人物

① 高中生②大学生③工作者

2 如何设计呢?

加入多元素:任务的学校,公司

① 高中生:the example of my little brother Tom, who is studying in the high school attached

to the Tsinghua University, can support my idea.

句型:the example(case/fact/instance) of…, who is studying in…., can support my idea(opinion/viewpoint/standpoint)

The example of my confidante Alice

② 大学生

This provides(proves/offers/shows)a good(typical/concrete/notable/striking)instace of a student called….., majoring in….in/at……University of California at Los Angeles

③ 作者(smith)

Take my uncle Smith as an example. He is in charge of business while working in the Microsoft Corporation.

Take …as an example/instance. He/she is in charge of (is responsible for/manages/takes charge of)…while working in the corporation (company/firm) of….

花样例子 让例子更丰富

① 人物背景→曾经情况→变化过程→结果

② 人物对比(有共性)

人物背景1~2→没有在本理由影响下的A1~2→在本段理由影响下的B的情况2~3句

Explanation:

Sports→healthy→happy→beneficial to life

Example:

Grandpa retired from Microsoft Corporation and aunt work in university

A not like playing sports but instead watching TV at home→every day spent 12 hours on various TV programs t→turn into a couch potato→unhealthy

In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed.

To begin with, there is no doubt that people can improve themselves, when they accept team members’ criticism. In a group, humans who are not good at listening to others’ advice can know about their own strength and weakness more completely. Thus, they have enough capacity to achieve success through promoting themselves. The example of my friend Alice, who is studying in University of California at San Diego and majoring in microeconomics, can support my standpoint. Last semester, she was a leader in an academic team conducting a research on aging population. At first, she was too pretentious, refusing any advice. Such the paper, merely consisting of her own view, definitely failed to satisfy her professor. Later, the whole team gathered and discussed the research topic together. Unlike the previous performance, she adopted their suggestions this time, deleted useless contents and added a key point of the aging impacts on the industrial upgrade. Finally their essay achieved a high score thanks to Alice’s taking suggestions.

伴随状语:是主句主语的形式主语

结果状语:是整个句子的形式主语

Which way do you think is the best way for a student to make new friends? A. joining a sports team.

To begin with, there is no doubt that students can cooperate with teammates and learn more about each other during sports game. In a sports game, taking the basketball game for example, players have to communicate and exercise together, thus winning the game. The instance of my friend Tommy, who is studying in the University of California at San Diego, can support my view perfectly. He is the international student and had a quite miserable time for everything was new and no friend could lend him a hand when he was new here. Nevertheless, he participated in the school basketball team. As a team member, doing exercises with partners was an everyday routine and he had no choice but had to follow. During this process, the relationship between him and the team members gradually got improved. Soon he made friends with his teammate, having a brilliant time in a foreign country.

Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than in the past.

To begin with, there is no doubt that the promoted medical technology is a critical ingredient to help citizens maintain good health. Medicine and medical technology are no longer what they used to be. So considerable is the medical progress that a great number of deadly diseases in the past cannot contribute to deaths currently. My great-grandfather, died from the cardiovascular disease 20 years ago. Such a disease is not absolutely incurable nowadays. If he could accept brilliant treatment and took the synthetic medicine at that time, chances were that he could have enjoyed a longer life-span. By contrast, the example of my grandfather, an 85-year-old pensioner as vigorous as an 18-year-old teenager, can support my opinion vividly. He has been suffering diabetes for fifteen years. However, thanks to the progressive medicine, such a miserable disease does not bother him at all. In addition, he now is still active and even participated in an international marathon race with a crowd of young guys last year. It is the tremendous increase in the medical level that brings my grandfather good health.

To begin with, there is no doubt that the promoted medical technology is a crucial ingredient to help citizens maintain good health. The improvement of medicine, medical instrument and treatment results in a higher quality of medical and health service. Patients are able to recover more quickly and easily, and thus maintaining a good condition easier. The example of my grandfather, an 85-year-old pensioner, can support my standpoints vividly.

让步段的写作

他好我更好。增强文章全面性和客观性。

让步段的具体结构

1从对方角度出发:

对方观点+对方理由(好处/evidence)+反驳对方的理由(不可行,不是好处,坏处,无效,替代方案)+(可举例) 转回我方观点

【子】 undoubtedly, it is generally accepted that increasing teacher’s payment will to

some extent improve their work efficiency(对方观点). Since satisfactory

payment could serve as an effective engine driving people to strive for more

excellent performance in their career. (对方理由)But one problem with

focusing on money while imparting knowledge is that teachers will pay less

attention to children’s comprehensive capabilities.(反驳理由) Therefore, the

quality of education in a country does not simply depend on the increase of

teachers’ salaries. (转回我方观点)

【1】审题 直译

初步确认立场

【2】正方反方

先想我方理由,再想对方理由

【3】反驳对方理由

In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed.

Admittedly, some people argue that people refusing others’ criticism can succeed, since refusing to accept advice enables people to follow their own idea and helps them to stick to their belief, which is a crucial ingredient for any achievement. However, people seem to fail to take into account the fact that no one in the world is Mr. Right. No people on earth can avoid making mistakes. Once something wrong appears, it is the best policy for one to listen to sincere

suggestions and correct the mistake in order to succeed. Taking my friend Alice, who is studying in the University of California at San Diego and majoring in mathematics. She is of unbelievable talent and always achieves a full score in the examinations. Once she helped her professor conduct a research and unconsciously missed a decimal point in the paper, despite the

suggestions from her teammates, she still held on to her calculation stubbornly. However, this time she did make a mistake, which caused a heavy loss for their academic research. Since then, Alice have been modest all the time and listened to others’ advice carefully. Accordingly, such miserable accidents never happen once more. As a result, it is of considerable significance to accept others’ criticism so as to succeed.

独立写作结尾段

总结全篇文章,题目同一改写(换词,换句子,派生词,主被动,换顺序)

To conclude, for what has been discussed above, I insist that arts, music and drama should be good subjects for the early education of children. (总结)They will help children develop intelligence and hobbies as well as a bright.(展望)

In a word, from what has been discussed above, I insist that

总结自己的常用句型

With the rising concerns about (题目中的关键字) in the modern society, hardly can the significance of (题目中的关键字) can be understated. Recently, a fierce debate is taking place,(题目的反问)?Quite a few contend that (反方观点),while others conceive differently. Individually, 正方观点

To begin with, there is no doubt that 主体理由。解释。The example of my friend

Alice, who is studying in the University of California at San Diego and majoring in 根据题目选(或者,my uncle Tony, who is the director of sales in the National City Bank of New York). 例子。As a result, it is that(强调句型+观点)

Admittedly, some people prefer that 反方观点,since 反方原因. However, people seem to fail to take into account the fact that 反驳反方。Taking …as an example, 例子。Consequently, 正方观点(用it 形式主语)

In a word, from what has been discussed above, I insist that ….(重复观点)。展望(有利于)(be beneficial to/promote/encourage)


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